Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that develop the mind, such as reading and doing crossword puzzles. Others feel that it is important to give one’s mind a rest in leisure time. Discuss.
As we are human we naturally need to rest leisure time to stress of work and everyday life. In fact, every individual need to do what they want and . Personally, I prefer to be active during this time because . Moreover, people are free what they do their leisure time, and nobody can say what is the best.
Some people want to relax after their day of work. These people may prefer to relax by watching movies, reading or getting a massage. People who have a such as doctors, teachers and builders may choose these types of activities. If you are a doctor, you may feel that you want to let your body rest after work and you don’t want to do a five kilometer run after work, because you are already physically tired.
On the other hand, some people choose to be active in their leisure time because they do . For example, these people many spend all day sitting on a chair and their work. At the end of a working day, they a backache, and all of their body tired so they need to stretch their arms and improve their health by doing some activity such as going to the gym or swimming.
To sum up, the important thing is that people want to stay healthy by choosing what is best for them. In my view, the wrong way is to stay at home in your leisure time if you have a job.
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Of all the freetime activities, I like reading books most because it brings me many good aspects. First and foremost, book is a cheap way to get information so I have good chance to widen my knowledge not only in the fields I study but also in other sections in life . Moreover, reading books makes me know better about people around the world and the way they live. Besides, there is no denial that books always help me relax. Whenever I am under pressure, I find a novel to read, many stories in which allow me to temporarily forget all trouble happening in my daily life. Sometimes, before I go to bed, I choose some short fairy tales to read to have a sound sleep. In addition, through romantic and meaningful stories, I can learn how to control my feeling and even learn to be more patient. One more benefit of reading book is that it makes me express words fluently, therefore, I can improve my communication skill better and better. In short, reading books is my main hobby and I will make best use of its advantages to have a happy lifestyle
- Of all the free time activities I like doing , I like reading books the most because it brings me many good aspects.
- Besides, I can't deny the fact that books always help me relax.
- reading books is a hobby that makes a worthwhile time pass by and I will make use of its advantages to have a happy lifestyle
Tulipgirl, I absolutely agree with you. Reading is one of the best hobby you have to develop, it does not only enhance your vocabulary, believe me it also takes you places. It's one of many motivations I have in writing, traveling and exploring the world at its best.
Reading is one of the best way to learn and expand your horizons and reading leads to writing. There's nothing like reading your own article and have everyone read it as well. I want to share with you some points in writing Tulipgirl;
- paragraph,break your ideas in paragraphs so that your readers can breath and keep reading
- sentence construction and logical order, make sure your ideas are in smooth flow and logical order so your readers understand the idea behind your article and were your story is heading.
- Proof read your article before submitting it as this will tell you if you need to refine it or if it's ready to be submitted
Keep reading and write more.